Monday, July 16, 2007

Thought
for Tisca

is it that our children choose us
their small hands in who we marry
choose who their parents will be

before us, our creator, our ancestors
after us, our children
caught between the past and future

we think our choices are our own


© Obediah Michael Smith, 2007
4:52 p.m. 16/07/07

2 Comments:

Blogger The Mafudian said...

i love the imagery...children caught between the past and the future...amazing

Wednesday, July 18, 2007 11:02:00 AM  
Blogger Obie Quiet said...

Does this misinterpretation mean that this poem needs fixing or does the reader need to take more care, look more closely? I do remember moving line 6 up as part of stanza 2. It had been part of stanza 3. Stanzas 2 and 3 each had 2 lines:

Thought

is it that our children choose us
their small hands in who we marry
choose who their parents will be

before us, our creator, our ancestors
after us, our children

caught between the past and future
we think our choices are our own


© Obediah Michael Smith, 2007

I wanted the meaning though, less plain, less clear; to create tension - this possible confusion. The meaning in stanza 1 though, makes conclusion mafudian has arrived at untenable.

In stanza 1 already, the children establish the future; ancestors and God belong to the past; it is not the children therefore who are caught between the past and the future.

The poem's theory suggest the possibility of the future, in collusion with the past, being able to manipulate the radio-like knobs of the present and change or choose the station, as it were.

Thursday, July 19, 2007 5:43:00 AM  

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